DavidOrr's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Groove that Chools your Bools]

Nice guitar playing!

You're a great guitarrist, I would love to see you playing in person tearing it up.

I gave you a 0 for effort because it probably is really easy for you :).

[Gray Matter--_--]

Nice work

I got the opportunity to review this song over at Garageband.com. I gave it a 5 to try to help your rating on the charts out a bit. I'll just put here what I wrote over there:

I like the fade in at the beginning with the piano melody. I think the quality of the piano is a little tinny, perhaps mellow it out a little. Also, I would personally add a little bit of reverb onto it.

I like the break from the piano at 0:32, you did a good job staying away from making the piano part get repetitious and boring.

1:00- It sounds like you are trying to break away from the piano rhythm and put in a new melody- but it's not quite new enough for my ear. I think you set yourself up for a nice motif when you move to Bb. Having just a simple melody running in between the constant piano rhytmic motion would work well.

I enjoyed all of the sound effects you throw in through out the piece- it gives it a unique feel.

It ends a little too soon in my opinion. You give yourself some grea material, and it could be developed a lot more. Good work all in all though!

[Paradise on E ZENON REMIX]

Zenon WOW!

Dude, I'm speechless. This shows off your skills in so many ways- it's awsome. You did a great job with it. I think my only complaint is the tempo changes. It's one of those ideas where you think it will sound awsome at the drawing board, but it doesn't quite work, it interupts the whole flow of the song.

But damn man, Paradise on E is a tough song to remix and to match it in musical quality is hard, but I think you've done it. You have my 5, and if I could give you more, I would.

PERVOK responds:

Thank you!
I did this all by ear, since i actually didn't get permission from b0unc3 that i could do it until I had already figured out the melody ;)

Once again, thanks!
(and the tempo changes were supposed to add a little bit o' drama :P )

[techno guitar riff]

Nice playing!

Way too short and such, but this is just a riff, so no biggie.

Your guitar playing is quite good, I never really realized that. Audacity is a pretty nice program for the price. I got such a good deal on it, I only paid 80 bucks plus like 5 bucks shipping- it was a steal!

:P

Thanks for your vote, OMGitsMrMaestro! You voted 5 for techno guitar riff, keeping its score at 5.00.

Hmm, don't ge tthat too often. Wonder how long it will last before zero voters come?

mhb responds:

thank you very much for the 5! i agree that audacity is pretty nice for the price. the fact that it can utilize vst's is great. someday soon i'll finish the song that this riff goes with. hopefully it turns out ok.

[Dark Matter (the next step)]

Ohh, you've gotten better!

Your music has gotten quite a bit more polished since the last time I listened to it! Great job!

Nice introduction of the instruments at the beginning. I would personally have a higher synth on top of the rest of the parts once you get towards the middle of the piece. You introduced one a little late for my taste, and I think the frequency could be slightly higher, along with the volume. Not much, but a little.

Great job, 5/5 hands down :)

attemptedperfection responds:

Thanks for the kind words!
after quite a few listens, I also noticed the high synth coming in a little too late... among other things... but your notice of the same issue assures that said issue will be resolved.
Thanks again for the review!

[-API- Anaconda]

Awsome track

I love the feel and the beat you got going on through the piece- it's awsome. You get so much praise, I'll just skip it all, mmmk?

I'm guessing you want a very dirty, bassy sound when the bass has the melody throughout the piece. However- It can be hard to make out what the melody is, because it is so low, so bassy, and so fast. I think it's a great melody, but maybe after a while double it up on higher instrument synth? Add a little punch to it. Maybe an orch hit to bring in the synth for added effect. That's what I would do. Maybe just doubling the bass up an octave and would do the trick- I dunno.

I love the little effects sprinkled around the piece- and the introduction was supurb. Awsome music API, I need to get around to reviewing and listening to more of your stuff.

[What People Want]

Not bad

This is definately one of your better works. I think the chorus part with the longer strings would have a better impact if you had a different chord progression in there. Also I think a break with just a drum beat and some sort of bass synth solo would be good.

Also, lay off the swears a bit- a few are alright I guess, but the whole part towards the end when you are talking about your fans and every other word is cussing- it just sounds obnoxious. If you ever make it big it would sound a little better, but it just sounds like you are trying to look cool right now.

Also, when you say Mother Fucker one time you sound like you are constipated (you're yelling or somthing).

" I'm never going to fucking stop"

...fucking? why? Use swears to accent a point, dont just throw it in there.

Don't get me wrong, I was pretty impressed with your rapping style and the lyrics are pretty solid too. Do somthing that makes you stand out and you may get noticed.

ThePedicidleGhost responds:

U no what man? Your right. Im gonna work on the cussin and makin myself stand out. Seriously. Thanks for the advice n the review. I appreciate it man.

[A Diriko]

Fans?

Judging by your download count, you don't have any fans. I don't mean to sound like a jackass, but get over yourself.

Try to do somthing new and interesting. Write a song in an odd time signature (5/4, 7/4), put unusual instruments. Use different and unique beats. Maybe throw in some sort of drum solo using. If you want to get noticed be different. You sound like just another wannabe.

ThePedicidleGhost responds:

True True. But most people dont know about my NG account. They mostly go 2 my soundclick adress or go 2 my offical website. (Which is still in the works but yet 864 people had went their with in the 1st 3 days it was up) N thanks for the advice. I'll keep that in mind.

[Tallent]

Talent?

You're right, I have no clue what TALLENT is, but if you are talking about talent...

I dont see any talent. Just the same guitar riff out of key vocals.

Random tempo change was too random. I would have a little more break in between the sections. I love how people people think that throwing in a "Shit" or "Mutha Fucka" or "Bitch" gives their song edge. Sorry, it doesn't. Especially if you're a 14 year old nobody, it just makes you look like an unoriginal copycat.

ThePedicidleGhost responds:

that song is an old hunk of doo doo brown I slapped 2 gether with in like.....Id say an hour. I didnt really much care about it. I just wanted 2 make a point. N thats what im all about. N I dont think cussin gives any body edge 2 be honest....no body cares about cussin, its words. Wow. not 2 mention thats the way I normally talk. N a nobody? Yea your right 2 a certain extent. Every body is somebody, some are more important then others. Me I aint as important as most people cuz all I wanna do is make people see what I see n Beleive my beliefs.

[_-=[Claiming the Heavens]=-_]

Wow have you gotten good!

Jezz Maestro you have improved so much! Great job and keep up the awsome work!

5/5

MaestroSorrow responds:

I hope to get much better, once I get a new comp! I pray that will be sometime soon.