I dunno
This really sounds like you ripped a midi. It would be one thing if you were actually playing this, but it's clear you are not. Of all pieces to have a computer play straight from a midi file this is probably one of the worst because of its expressive nature. I won't vote you down rate wise, I'll let other people give their opinions becaues I may be the minority.
Next time you upload a piece like this at least play it personally. There are many places where someone can find a midi version of this, so there is no point in putting a computer generated copy of this on newgrounds. (not to metion there were several mistakes in the score).
Sorry if this sounded a bit harsh, but I'm just giving my honest opinion.